Narrative – looking back, revision

Having had some more thoughts through the night I started to rework the assignment:

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40 Hindburn

40 Hindburn

After the wedding at Midland Road Station

After the wedding at Midland Road Station

72, Kimbolton Road

72, Kimbolton Road

The site of Bedford North Wing Hospital

The site of Bedford North Wing Hospital

36, Bamford Road

36, Bamford Road

20, Duchess Road

20, Duchess Road

Cemetery

Cemetery

It's ok

It’s ok

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4 thoughts on “Narrative – looking back, revision

  1. The layered images certainly add more to the narrative in terms of making it more direct. With this version there wouldn’t be need for written commentary, except that there’s an implication that the baby, boy and man could be the same (? not sure). I like it that you’ve kept the portrait book-ends but I prefer the original final one – here it looks as if they’re springing from you mother’s head. What if you cropped the bottom and extended the canvas at the top

    • Thanks Catherine, the final image is one about the ‘plantation’ of a family. The notion of how the notion of fecundity might be depicted. When my paternal grandparents celebrated their ‘Golden wedding’ they had 42 grandchildren present – I think more were produced later – my mother has quite a few and quite a few great grandchildren…I’ll have a think about your suggestion.

  2. Ultimately it’s a judgement call for you of course, but speaking purely as a viewer I found the first version much more powerful. With your narrative there were some compelling images that were quite stark and left a good deal to the imagination. I filled in some of the detail in my imagination quite easily but there was some increased tension and ambiguity from the gaps. Because this version fills in some of those gaps it grips my imagination less. I also find the pictures less satisfying visually as they are busier. Perhaps if I hadn’t seen version one first I would have a different reaction. I hope this is helpful or at least of interest.

    • Thanks Eileen, very helpful and getting another view is always beneficial in trying to understand how well it communicates. I agree that the second version removes some of the ambiguity, however I wondered about the additional layer, the additional voice in a conversation between foreground and background. Hmm , more to think about….

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